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It was simple
Not anything like the movies
But yet it was movie magic
Or maybe that's because I'm
A hopeless romantic.

We were sitting on the grass
Along with Lawerence whos
Hair was defeying all known
Laws of gravity as the sun
Hit the blonde locks.

I was laying my head on
Your legs while you were
Laying on the grass
Content with what I had
And pretending in my head.

We all play the question game
Throwing out questions we answer
And learn a bit about each other
Along the way as I watch the sun
Fliter through the green leaves above

Someone asks the question
Of are you a virgin
You and I both answer yes
And I'm the only one
Who answers no on being kissed.

I hear your voice as I watch
The light dance
"Do you want to change that?"
Part me hopes you are serious
But I feel like you're joking.

After all you've made it very
Clear I'm not what you want
Although you are what I want
It's up to you in the end
And you've said no.

"Sure why not." I shoot back.
Thinking you mean nothing by it
Suprise enters my mind as your face
Hovers over me, for once I can see
Emerald eyes without sunglasses.

And then the world goes silent
As your lips touch mine.
I feel something in me stirring
And dancing within
My eyes are closed.

And everything feels right.
I want to kiss you back
And ravish you with my slightly
Chapped lips
But its over too soon.

You sit back up and
I look up at the sky
A smile is on my face
And I can't help but feel
Like I can touch the sky.

I know you don't like me
But hell I can live with this
One
Simple
Kiss.
©2009 ~Emma-Hyde
:iconemma-hyde:

Author's Comments

True story.

Turned into a poem.

I've been bit by the love bug.

.....oh well

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:iconroyalocean:
In the third line, you said but yet. It's something that ticks off most English teachers big time, so if you ever want to make your English teacher pissed...

Anyway. This piece was very simple - which is a good thing - and flows together quite well. It seems almost conversational, which makes it very easy for the reader to connect and paint an image in their head as they are reading. It's not overly wordy or anything like that. It makes it just... flow.

On the other hand, there are a few minor spelling/grammar errors here and there..nothing too big, nothing too distracting.


--
It's nobody's business what's in my cup, what's in your cup, what's in their cup. It's your cup, drink it. Fuck you, and whatever was in my cup, I'm going to keep drinking it. Suck my dick, and my cup. - Lil Wayne
:iconemma-hyde:
I'm a writer I ignore my english teachers :P I'm glad I could paint the picture for you. If you like this people say that my other stuff that I have written flows like this. And thank you for the advice. It's nice to hear :)

--
If one is to be oneself then one must act like who they are
:iconroyalocean:
Haha, understandable!

But no problem (:


--
It's nobody's business what's in my cup, what's in your cup, what's in their cup. It's your cup, drink it. Fuck you, and whatever was in my cup, I'm going to keep drinking it. Suck my dick, and my cup. - Lil Wayne
:iconemma-hyde:
:hug:

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If one is to be oneself then one must act like who they are
:iconshebzee:
Amazing, as usual.
so sweet.
and beautiful.

--
ME: Guess who's baaaaack!
G.D.: Back again?! Is it shady?!
ME: HAHAHA! Shelby's back back back, tell a friend!
G.D.: Oh, !@#$ did you hear Shelby's back?!
:iconemma-hyde:
:blush: Thank you. It's how it happened too.

--
If one is to be oneself then one must act like who they are
:iconshebzee:
your life is so much cooler than mine.
:D
<3
no fair tho.

--
ME: Guess who's baaaaack!
G.D.: Back again?! Is it shady?!
ME: HAHAHA! Shelby's back back back, tell a friend!
G.D.: Oh, !@#$ did you hear Shelby's back?!
:iconemma-hyde:
Not really cooler. More stressful is like it. The girl who kissed me doesn't like me back and did it to be nice so I wouldn't have to be left out.....plus I also like her and a straight girl. You see how stressful that is.

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If one is to be oneself then one must act like who they are
:iconshebzee:
oh.
okay.
yeah, I can see how that would be stressful.
I'm straight so I don't really know how it is, but it seems like it would be hella hard.

--
ME: Guess who's baaaaack!
G.D.: Back again?! Is it shady?!
ME: HAHAHA! Shelby's back back back, tell a friend!
G.D.: Oh, !@#$ did you hear Shelby's back?!
:iconemma-hyde:
It is. It's hard cuz I have to watch what I do. I was dancing with the straight girl at a dance and there were a few times I had to stop.

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If one is to be oneself then one must act like who they are

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